The chart below shows the type of transport young people in four countries prefer to use.

The chart below shows the type of transport young people in four countries prefer to use.
The bar chart compares the proportion of the young preference for using different types of vehicles in 4 countries namely: Great
Britain
, the USA,
Germany
, and
France
.
Overall
,
car
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the car
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is the most popular type of transport,
excepts
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for
Germany
,
while
motorcycle
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the motorcycle
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is
choosen
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chosen
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minority of the youth. Looking at the graph for more detail, the ratio of car preference is the highest
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in
France
(about 75%), and stays at
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amount in Great
Britain
and the USA,
while
this
figure
for
Germany
is lower (40%).
By contrast
, the young who prefer to
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motorbike
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motorbikes
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in Great
Britain
,
France
and
Germany
account for around 10% and
this
figure
for the United States is
threehold
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threefold
threshold
. Bicycle is the most popular type of
vehicles
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in
Germany
(45%).
Bike
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is ranked
at
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apply
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the
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apply
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second place
of
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the popularity of
transports
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transport
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in Great
Britain
and
France
, are about 38% and 15% respectively.
However
, the ratio of young people who prefer cycle is 10% in the USA, which is the lowest
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words britain, germany, france, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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