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In many countries, there is shortage of housing due to growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the country side, others argue for the regeneration of cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of building new towns in the country?

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The population in many nations is escalating at an alarming rate which is resulting in the reduction of houses.
Although
 numerous
people
 emphasise that the construction of new
towns
 is the only solution, others argue that improving amenities in
cities
 can help.
This
 essay puts light on the benefits and drawbacks of constructing new
towns
 in the nation. There are a number of benefits of building new
towns
 if the population is increasing.
Initially
, the government can accommodate a huge amount of homeless
people
as well as
 the population from existing
towns
 will decline when they will decide to migrate to a new town.
In addition
, The
revenue
 of the
country
 will increase by new
businesses
 in that town. To illustrate, if authorities will be successful to accommodate the majority of homeless
people
 and new generations,
businesses
 will start to grow in those
towns
 which will be beneficial for the government to increase their
revenue
 because the new
businesses
 will pay taxes to the
country
.
Thus
, new
towns
 can support the nation by providing new houses for
people
 and
revenue
 for the government. The disadvantages of
this
 approach cannot be ignored and the first major concern for the authorities is deforestation which always comes to mind when authorities start new projects that are detrimental to the ecosystem. Another issue is the funds which are required in huge amounts to build new
towns
 within a
country
 and many undeveloped nations cannot afford the cost of building new big
towns
.
For example
, India is the second largest
country
 in the world having immense pollution
due to
 a lack of
revenue
 and financial conditions they are unable to build new
towns
 and
cities
.
Therefore
, establishing new
towns
 and
cities
 is not easy without disturbing the ecosystem and having sufficient funds. In conclusion,
while
 the construction of new
cities
 can be fruitful in a number of ways
such
 as an increment in the
revenue
 of the nation by the new
businesses
 which will take place there, not every
country
 is economically strong enough to start these big projects
as well as
 it will disturb the nature for sure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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