Some health problems are directly linked to people's life choices. Why do people make these choices? What can be done to encourage them to make healthier choices instead?

In
this
era of technology, health issues
such
as heart
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, diabetes and more are become a phenomenon
due to
people
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choices
. From my personal point of view, communities today are
to
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busy with their own careers and
then
prefer to eat
fastfood
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fast food
instead
.
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reasons why
people
make these options and the best solutions to motivate society in pursuing a healthy life. In regard to the causes of
this
problem, most
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people
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nowadays are busy pursuing their job achievements. Since they are too busy with their daily tasks or goals, they don't have much time to prepare proper meals and
thus
tend to ignore
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what type of ingredients
that
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they are consumed.
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,
a
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research has shown that the number of
fast food
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restaurants in Malaysia had increased in the past decades
due to
its
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quick services
where
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it
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prevents
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customers from waiting too long.
Thus
, there is no wonder why these types of businesses becoming the best
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society. Seeing the problem with a brighter mind, many solutions can be helpful to encourage
people
in making healthy
choices
. One of the ideal
solution
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is
by
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establish
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a campaign regarding the impact of fast food industries on our physical health. Other than that, the media play an important role in reducing the amount of
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of
these kind
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of businesses from
influence
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people
's behaviours or
choices
.
For instance
, the authorities can control the media from
infuencing
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influencing
people
's
mind
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and
thighten
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tighten
up the laws and regulations upon responsible parties.
Therefore
,
this
affort
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effort
might reduce the percentage of patients
suffer
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from dangerous diseases in
the
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society as a whole. In the nutshell, health problems are serious issues because
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cause harmful effects on humans. The best approaches to deal with it are to educate
citizen
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citizens
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about its damaging effects and
also
for the government to control the media from spreading unwanted information in relation to
unhealthy
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
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