Some believe technology has made our lives too complex and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed by
some
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that our
lives
have become more
perplex
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with
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and we can simplify these situations without technology. I mostly disagree with
this
statement because the main aim
technological
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developments are for
people
to facilitate their
lives
and
the
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, our burden would have
more heavy
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against duties and nature.
Firstly
, opposite the view
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statement
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, technology has been developing for weakening and reducing
people
’s responsibility in life.
Although
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adaptation to new innovations is a compulsive process for some, these developments have been made for assisting to solve individuals’ issues in every part of their
lives
. To illustrate that,
smart phones
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have become a considerable assistance
of
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our duties
such
as communication, calculation and exploration
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information.
People
can figure out their many transitions easily by these
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.
Apart from
this
, vehicles
such
as cars, buses and trucks have taken an important role to ease transportation and civilization.
Thus
, these improvements are relieving our standards rather than being complex.
Secondly
, without these technologies,
people
’s circumstances would not be better than
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recent
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individuals’
workload
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would increase. In case of closing some systems and
items
,
people
should do their automated
works
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.
For example
, refrigerators
are not work
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for freezing and
people
maintain their foods in conventional ways.
In addition
,
people
may deprive
from
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communication
such
as watching television and calling their relatives. In short, without
technologies
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,
people
would be in trouble in terms of dealing
out
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their work and communication. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
this
statement.
Although
some technologies create bewildering problems
in
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their
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first times, in my opinion, they facilitate our
lives
in their
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advancement and without them, our
lives
would become more complex. 45 dk.
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