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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#students #work #results #time #education #pressure
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 studying is extremely common nowadays.There
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different reasons and situations causing
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 to work during their
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 years. Some of the students are working,because most places require at least a year's of experience for gaining a job position.
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,students are trying to gain experience in the work field which are learning ,during their education.The other reason is that the cost of living is increasing every year,so life becoming harder and more expensive.
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, communities who are studying full-
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 and do not have any support from their families are forced to work to cover their expenses.
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 could cause serious issues connected with their learning.A lot of
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 spent on lectures and after , the other half of the day working can lead to feeling overwhelmed and exhausted.In
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situation there is barely any free space for studying and socializing.
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 the reason why some
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 describe the university years as the hardest and loneliness of their lives. Fortunately,there is a decision in every situation.Most of the schools provide scholarships and undergraduate loans,which could help a lot in those hard years.The interests are low and after graduating it feels like you do not have to return anything.,
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 accommodations are affordable and the perfect option for working
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.Another helpful tip is to manage your
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 efficiently.That skill can be learned from the most famous and richest
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 on youtube.They are talking about
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 management and why it is so important.That could be really helpful for a working
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 because when you know how to use your
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 correctly you can achieve anything. In conclusion,I think working
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 studying is extremely hard,but with the right knowledge of
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 management and
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 financial ,help it could be achievable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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