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In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures.

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In today's societies, the majority of people are given the interesting fact that their life expectancy is surprisingly increasing
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 the higher quality of life. Indeed, massive exposure to a healthy lifestyle nowadays successfully brings positive outcomes to the chance of longevity, but
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 may
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 bring some disadvantages. I will meticulously elaborate on
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 issue below.
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 with, it is indisputable that the ageing community may need more support from the government
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 as access to excellent medical facilities.
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, not only acquire higher quality health amenities, but they
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 need comfortable housing in order to keep a zen and peaceful soul. These circumstances may cause the reduction of financial aid for education and climate change because of the need of providing these elderly group's continuous support. That being said, the government can take proper measures to hinder any shortcomings that may come with the decrease in financial aid. First and foremost, some developed countries that are facing
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 kind of problem can ask some help from the World Bank to give them some loans to build elderly's care facilities. After they have some profits from investors who are interested to support
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 kind of business, the authorities can pay back the World Bank.
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, every challenge always comes up with solutions, we as humans just need to find out how to tackle it.
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 life expectancy brings more drawbacks to the surface, the advantages far weigh the negative consequences. People who live in developed countries can live longer
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 the happy and supportive environment that surrounds them, which proves that the countries fully prioritize their citizens' well-being.
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