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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leasing to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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The problem of species loss and
deduction
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 of biodiversity is increasing by leaps and bounds. In
this
 essay, I will address the crucial reasons and quick measures
can
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 be implemented to overcome
this
 issue. There are myriads of causes that are contributing to the destruction of biodiversity, and animal extinction.
While
 the preponderant one is
rise
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a rise
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 in human activities.
This
 is because people are destroying the forest and vegetation for their own
benefits
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benefit
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.
The
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 eminent example of
this
 is tree fire can be commonly seen in developing countries to make space for supermarkets and huge
building
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buildings
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.
Apart from
this
, hunting is another reason that leads to species loss. Some businessmen are extracting the skin and bones
if
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of
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animal
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animals
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 by killing them. Especially leather bags and shoes are expensive items in
the
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apply
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developed nations.
However
,
certain
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 viable antidotes can be imposed to diminish the aforesaid difficulties that will bring
the
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positive change in
the
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society.
Although
, The preeminent one is that Government must take strict actions to prevent
the
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hunting, and forest devastation. Authorities need to create
the
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awareness about
the
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a
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 healthy ecosystem. To illustrate, in
india
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India
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 the newspaper is considered
as
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a
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the
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 most reliable tool that
discuss
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 all the significant environmental issues.
in addition
 to it, young children should be encouraged to take part in various environmental activities that will
helps
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help
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 to preserve the ecosystem.
Besides
this
, organisations come forward to protect
the
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biodiversity
,
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 and resolve the ecological crisis. In conclusion, numerous remedies can be introduced in order to tackle the problematic situation of species extinction and deforestation.
Submitted by Navneet Dhand on

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