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In many countries people live longer and longer. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages.

#countries #people #development
In
this
 era,
due to
advance
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advances
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 in technology,
people
 now live longer than they did in the past decades. From my personal view, when
people
 live longer, they
able
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 to transfer their
tradition
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traditions
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 to next the generations but
this
 case will
increased
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 the number of populations.
This
 essay will
further
 elaborate
the
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 benefits,
drawbacks
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and drawbacks
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 and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. In regard to the benefit of longer life expectancy,
people
able
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are able
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 to pass their cultural traditions to
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the youngster
a youngster
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youngster
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youngsters
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 as what their
anchestor
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ancestors
ancestor
 did
previuosly
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previously
. Since older
people
 have more
experiences
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experience
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 and knowledge compared to
young
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the young
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 generation, the traditions can be kept for a long
perod
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period
 of time .
For example
, older
people
 can transfer
the
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knowledge regarding traditional dances, local recipes,
cultural
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and cultural
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 outfits and
also
 sometimes tell us about historical stories of
brave
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the brave
a brave
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army
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armies
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 in the past era.
Therefore
, society
able
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is able
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 to learn about their belonging and increase their patriotism spirit.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
of
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this
 issue. As
people
becoming
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become
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 older, they might not have a strong
body
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bodies
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 and energy as
adult
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an adult
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 community. They
also
 suffer
with
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from
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 many diseases
such
 as diabetes, heart disease and
athsma
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asthma
due to
 age factors.
Therefore
, families and government have to spend a lot of money
in
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on
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 providing healthcare and insurance for aged
people
.
For instance
, in Malaysia,
a
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reseach
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research
 has shown that the number of old folk's
home
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homes
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 increase significantly in the
last
 ten years to
accomodate
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accommodate
 senior
citizen
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citizens
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 in the country. In the nutshell,
live
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living
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 longer are good to deliver our cultural tradition to our child
however
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,however
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, it cost
people
 with
high
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the high
a high
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 cost of living and medicine
due to
 illness.
Therefore
, governments and communities can do many things to deal with
this
 situation.
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