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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of this trend outweighs the disadvantages.

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Globalisation has enabled
students
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 to travel to different parts of the world in their pursuit of education. In recent times, there is a surge in the number of University
students
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 opting
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countries
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 for their higher studies.
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 there are
advantages
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as well as
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 disadvantages
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this
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 trend, I personally believe that there are more pros than cons when compared. Most
students
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 who travel to different parts of the world for educational
purpose
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 are exposed to different cultures and languages.
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 aids them in future
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while
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 they start working as most of
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 colleagues at work hail from diverse roots. A good illustration of
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 can be seen in the fact that even the parliament has
alot
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a lot
 of members from different cultures and races.
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,
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skilled labour is much more appreciated as
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companies in
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foreign
countries
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 offer
better paying
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 jobs with short working hours when compared to
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 market. Despite numerous
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, there are some concerning aspects of
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 development. If most
students
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 move abroad after completing their graduation, the native
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 will lose their highly educated
students
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. These
students
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 are potential skilled labours in future who may work in their own country and help them prosper.
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, more than 200,000 Indian
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 are
eaning
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earning
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 well in excess of
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 thousand
grands
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grants
 per annum in
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 States of America
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 India has about 33% of world poverty. If those Indian
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 were investing their
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skills
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 and time in their own country, it would have aided the financial situation of India.
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, the prestige of educational institutes is usually derived on the basis of how many
students
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 desire to study there. Eventually,
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 phenomenon of
prefering
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preferring
 foreign Universities will deprecate the prestige of
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domestic Universities. A good
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illustration
 of
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 can be seen in the fact that most South Asian Universities today rank lower than they did five decades ago
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 most immigrants and international
students
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 hail from the same region. No matter the cons of
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 trend, I strongly believe that the
advantages
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 far outweigh the disadvantages. I concede that
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 may negatively impact the prestige and economy of the
countries
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 those
students
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 belong to, but at the same time, those potentially skilled
students
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 who go on to work abroad in future usually end up transferring a big share of their wealth which plays a significant part in increasing foreign remittances for their native country.
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, 11% of the GDP of India comes through foreign remittances.
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 popularity of overseas education has
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 fair share of upsides
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the
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downsides. On one
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 it helps in cultural exchanges and finding better career opportunities
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 at the same, the native
countries
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 may lose out on their highly educated
students
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 and the reputation of the educational institutes may get compromised. I personally believe that
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 far outweigh the disadvantages because there are three major
advantages
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while
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 the cons are two-fold.
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