Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or relegious festivals, during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves.

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people
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have forgotten the meaning
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behind
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traditional or religious
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, during festival periods,
people
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currently only want to enjoy themselves.
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almost celebrate both of them.Because celebrating
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a rest and
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a good
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. During the year we celebrate these
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. So
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immemorial.
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Navruz
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.
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holiday
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it
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is
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day in their lives. Sumalak -the main
holiday
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dish of
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.
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somsa
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soma
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ismalak
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salak
dumpling
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. Since ancient times, in Uzbekistan
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Navruz
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customs were arranged. Many
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traditions have survived until today . Again we celebrate Eid al-Fitr. During
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, doing sacrificial with good intentions
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holiday
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. At
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time
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we play some kinds of games. Another best
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is the New year. Almost all nations celebrate
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holiday
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. Especially
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is
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holiday
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a holiday
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love to children.
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Eve children want to eat kinds of sweets.
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to
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this
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is cake, chocolate and so on. We
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make
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, soup ,
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and some
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salads .
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nowadays social media change our lives.
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is because we have forgotten the meaning of holidays.
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some
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don't get
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the meaning of
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.Not important
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meaning of
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for them. To be honest it changed the how world our view .In short,
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source has pushed us to modern thinking.
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, many
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believe that have not forgotten the meaning of
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festivals
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.
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