The two maps illustrate differences on an access of street to city hospital in the years 2007 and 2010

The two maps illustrate differences on an access of street to city hospital in the years 2007 and 2010
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The two maps illustrate differences in access streets to city hospitals in the years 2007 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that the major changes had been the addition of two roundabouts at the junctions of Ring
Road
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with Hospital
Road
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and City
Road
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in turn, and the building of a car park for the public on the east
as well as
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a bus station on the west. In 2007, there existed a car park for both staff and the public on the southeast
side
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which was separated into different places in 2010: staff remained on the southeast
side
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while
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the public
had
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moved to the east
side
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. An enormous bus station had been constructed on the west
side
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having straight directions to both roundabouts. The size and location of the hospital had remained unchanged
as well as
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Ring
Road
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.
However
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, six bus stops had been removed by 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "differences" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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