Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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In the modern
world
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,
music
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plays a vital role in
people
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's lives, so some
people
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believe
music
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has a significant role in gathering
individuals
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from all over the
world
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regardless of their traditional or age groups. I completely agree with
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statement and the reasons will be discussed in the following paragraph.
To begin
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with , the main reason why
music
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can help
people
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to be together is that it can be expressed and understood by any
individuals
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around the
world
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.As we know that a person can be fully entertained by the
music
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even though they do not understand the language because of the rhythm and tones, which convey through the
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.
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, the song
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released by a band called one direction is worldwide popular because of its artistic background and orchestral support.
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, it is obvious that
music
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can
also
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bind together any age group
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people
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from any country because it can bring happiness and relaxation to the human mind. As we can see the modern generation today like classical
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from
90s
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, and the same can be seen in
older
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the older
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generation ,
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love to hear hip hop or jazz
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.
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, in electronic
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,concerts we can see the presence of elderly
individuals
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because they are getting amused or pleased by the
music
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.
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,
it is clear that
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music
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can bring peace and happiness to the
world
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and I strongly agree with
this
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because it can be expressed and felt by most
people
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,
besides
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it can
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be easily conveyed through different aged groups
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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