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You are planning a business trip to another city. You will have some free time to do some sight seeing while you are there. Write a letter to a friend who lives in the city you will visit. In your letter explain the purpose of the trip ask about things to do and see in the city invite your friend to do something with you during your visit

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Dear Simon, I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about my upcoming trip to your
city
 next month. As you know, I have been working in a multinational company as a human resources manager since 2018. Recently my company launched a project in
Dhaka
,
this
 is because I will travel to your
city
 for two weeks to see the progress status of our new project in
Dhaka
. Apart from the official work, I have planned to explore the beauty of
Dhaka
 during
this
 visit. As far as I am concerned, there are many beautiful places in the capital
city
 of
Dhaka
such
 as the Burigonga River, the parliament house, the botanical garden, and so on. I am very much keen to visit these outstanding places with you, as you have been living in the capital
city
 for a long day.
In addition
, I have decided to go to Jamuna Future Park and Old
Dhaka
 for shopping purposes and to have delicious food respectively. You are highly requested to accompany me during
this
 visit so that we can spend a quality time by visiting the mentioned places. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon regarding
this
 matter. Yours lovingly, Faisal
Submitted by faisalmahamood on

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task achievement
Although the general purpose of the trip was mentioned, there could be more specific details about the project which would enrich the task response.
coherence cohesion
Include more varied linking words to improve cohesion between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone consistently throughout the letter to match the writing tone required for IELTS General Training Task 1.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea to the reader, followed by supporting information or requests related to that idea.
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