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It has been argued that we are living in a throw-away society in which people throw away what they use in daily life instead of recycling or reusing it. Why has this happened and how can we address this problem?

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It is true that
people
 in our society are more used to throwing away what they use and buying new
things
 and have no perception of saving. I imagine that there are a variety of possible reasons for
this
，and actions can be taken to tackle
this
 issue. In my perspective, the main three factors could result in the problem.
Firstly
, school education has little attention to environmental protection and sustainable development in most countries.
Thus
, from their student stage,
people
 usually have no concept that
things
 they throw away can damage the environment
such
 as air and rivers.
Secondly
,
people
also
 are influenced by various commercial promoting activities
such
 as shopping festivals，which largely encourage customers to buy as quickly as possible in order to fully p pursue commercial income.
People
 are already accustomed to getting a new one when something is broken.
Thirdly
,lacking recycling facilities and systems is another important reason for
this
 problem，especially in some small cities.
People
 have no idea
of
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where to recycle
things
. To deal with
this
 problem, I consider that 3 steps need to be taken. The change must start with the education system which will form an intense conception of protecting the environment and recycling by teaching children.
Also
, companies must take responsibility for society,
such
 as by producing reused products. At the same time, the government should allocate more money to the construction of basic facilities which could provide a place to receive
things
 that are thrown away but still useful,
such
 as old-fashioned clothes. A throw-away society is probably facing more challenges in the future. We need to take some actions , from aspects of education、commercial group and government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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