The society is based on rules and laws. The society would not function well if individuals were free to do whatever they want. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about
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regulars.
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, whether
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society would function well
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laws
is a controversial issue. In my view, it is acceptable to reasonably
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rules and
this
action will build a
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future.
First,
it is clear that
it is
laws
that could protect
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benefit, which could stimulate their enthusiasm in the
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of innovation and
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social development.
For example
, we have business
laws
in China, which could
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ban big companies to plagiarize small
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design
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. So, it means small films could survive fierce competition with their creative ideas. The world
end
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up can be run well with the benefit
from
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those ideas. Meanwhile,
social
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club
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should compulsively comply with the rules,which could protect our rights.
For instance
, the
animals
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rights club could not
to
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fire the LV factory, which
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animal’s
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fur to make bags.
This
is because crocodiles and the factory have their own rights equally. So, without the rules, our society will in chaos. There is not to say that the overly strong regulars would not
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reduce economic development. But those negative effects are limited. Of course ,there are many factors to influence the
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revolving
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such
as public morals,
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and culture. Because those keys are not compulsively so the regular still is the most important thing.
Finally
, rules have
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impression
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the
world
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function well. Meanwhile, we should not ignore the other bad effects
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the rigid
laws
bring. Only by doing so can our society maintain dynamic and sustainable development.
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