The diagram below describes the structure of a home smokery and how it works.
The diagram given provides information about the stage
on
how a home smokery works.
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of
Overall
there are three stages on how to make a foggy for cooking. Two steps happen on underground
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the underground
an underground
level
and the remaining step happens on the above ground
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above-ground
level
.
As shown in the diagram, firstly
there is a lid
, which can be open
and Wrong verb form
opened
close
. The first Replace the word
closed
lid
has a function to let the fresh air
in. When the first lid
opens, the fresh air
come
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comes
in to
the installation and goes to the Join the words
into
chamber
below the ground level
. Then
, the fresh air
passes through the second chamber
. Secondly
, the second lid
in stage two has
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apply
function
as a door to let in the wooden Fix the agreement mistake
functions
of
logs. Change preposition
apply
While
this
stage occurs, the fresh air
flows through the installation and contributes to the combustion process, which help
the process of burning wooden logs. Change the verb form
helps
Thirdly
, after
this
process has done
, the smoke Add a missing verb
been done
produced
and passed through the Add a missing verb
is produced
chamber
installation. Finally
, the smoke goes to the chamber
above ground level
, which placed the hanging food (fish and meat) for cooking.Submitted by mdelvega90 on
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