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As countries become more developed, many fast food outlets move into the country giving local people greater access to fast food, advantage and disadvantage:

#countries #food #outlets #move #country #people #access #advantage
Most
the
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people especially youngsters love fast
food
 and the fact that has become easily available in the past few years has really changed the dynamic of fine
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 in and home-cooked
food
. It certainly has its advantages and disadvantages which we will be discussing
further
. With fast
food
 being readily available, it has become easier for working mothers to grab and feed their children. Rather than waking up early in the morning and preparing
food
. It has a variety of options
also
, which makes it even more interesting, everyday new flavours and items. One does not have to worry about making meals when inviting people over. And it has become the most popular
food
 for casual hangouts. Having said that, one cannot deny that fast
food
 is not very healthy and daily consumption can lead to some very serious consequences. As the world is growing, our eating habits and quality of
food
 have become drastically poor which led to hazardous illnesses. Back in ,time people used to live for 100 years and above, now life expectancy has come down to 70-80 years. The major reason is poor
food
 intake. In conclusion,
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the expansion of fast
food
 chains can be troublesome but individually one has to look out for themselves. In today's fast-growing world saving time has become essential for everyone but health is equally important.
Hence
 things should always be consumed in the right balance.
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