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The society is based on rules and laws. The society would not function well if individuals were free to do whatever they want. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Rules and
laws
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 play an indispensable role in regulating our behaviours. It is generally considered that without regulations
society
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 would run into serious problems. I agree with
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 opinion. There is no doubt that rules and regulations will inevitably restrain individual freedom and even hamper the development of
society
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.
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, if a country release
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 to restrict business, there will be fewer leading companies and the industries of
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 country may remain underdeveloped, having an adverse effect on economic development.
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, if high-income earners are supposed to shoulder high taxes, they may haven’t motivation to make more effort to improve their income.
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, governments can relax restrictions and foster innovations, which can contribute to social progress.
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, if social members abide by norms and rules,
society
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 can maintain regulation and peace, which will contribute to economic prosperity. They should obey traffic regulations,
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, traffic accidents will increase and traffic congestion will become a problem.
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, if there are no
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 to penalize those who sell fake goods, consumers will be discouraged to purchase products, causing a negative impact on the economy. What’s more, without
laws
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, offenders will not be punished and
people
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 cannot learn how to respect
others
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. Some
people
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 may be motivated by self-interest and hurt
others
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 without being penalized.
people
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 will lack a sense of security
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 frequent crime. Some
people
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 may make a lot of noise in public, which will affect
others
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. Without
laws
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, they will not be punished and they cannot learn how to respect
others
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. In a nutshell,
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laws
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 and social norms will restrain self-freedom and social vitality to some extent, they can prevent
people
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 act at will. So it is reasonable
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 that without
laws
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,
society
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 can’t run smoothly.
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