Some people believe that the care of elderly people should be a priority of government spending. Others believe that government spending should focus more on young people, especially on their education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, the elder and younger generations have opposite opinions about themselves. Obviously, they have some arguments because of respect and upbringing.

This

essay will discuss the above topic and different opinions. Personally, I think that there is should be a balance between the

government

's focus on youth and elder people.

However

, the

government

should focus on education, they should make it more affordable and available for students because these days it is too complicated for students to be on free education in a university. They try so hard to prepare for the exams and sometimes their attempts are not succeded,

thus

they can afford to study in a university for free.

Furthermore

, I consider that the

government

should increase the

pension

for elder people. Many pensioners have a

too low

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pension

and if they do not have any family members they hardly survive on their

pension

. Some old people were at war and they deserve an increasing

pension

so they could

finally

live peacefully

that is

why they defend their country and city. In conclusion, I want to say that the

government

should focus on both generations so no one could be left with nothing. The youth should be focused more on education and the elder generation should be focused on increasing

pension

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and not on surviving

due to

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low

pension

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and high

price

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for

universitys

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universities

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Fully explain your ideas

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