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Some people believe that university students should pay all the costs of studies because university education only benefits students themselves not society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's era, there are still some discussions about whether giving a scholarship to
students
 can reap benefits for either the universities or society. I totally agree that providing opportunities to
students
 can be beneficial for all sectors, even for the country's development, and I will elaborate on my reasons below.
To begin
 with, it is indisputable that developed countries have the highest rank of top-tier universities in the world. That being said, education is the most crucial thing that can bring growth to the people of any country.
For example
, the United States has unsurprisingly dominated the ranks of best universities as it is one of the well-developed countries that already have excellent and proper planning in every sector.
This
 has proven that education can not only bring advantages to the people but
also
can
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change the way its citizens act and think on a daily basis. On top of that, not every professor has the privilege to carry out research by themselves, they need bolstering support from
students
,
such
 as PhD
students
, that will benefit each other
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 international journals.
For example
, PhD
students
 got relevant research experience and
also
 got paid by the university's office,
whereas
 the professor
also
 got professional work from these
PHD
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Ph.D.
 candidates.
To sum up
, well-educated citizens can bring more prosperity and a positive impact on the country's growth and development.
However
, the government should support academic enthusiasts by providing big deal opportunities
such
 as scholarships to excellent
students
, so they can get a diploma or bachelor's degree.
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task response
Provide a more balanced argument to consider counter-arguments and strengthen your position.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion need to be more developed and clearly express your position.
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