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Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

#think #business #contact #nations #disappearance #identity
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From ancient time
nationality
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 debate is ongoing.Some individuals claim that for more employability cultural contact between various communities is necessary,
while
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 others want to stick to their origins.
This
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 essay will analyze both
side
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 of the argument before arriving at a reasoned conclusion. On the one side, There are many advantages of
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 contact with different nation
people
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Firstly
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, it can help
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various
business
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businesses
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.
Eventhough
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Even though
 nowadays
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 of
people
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 moved
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 countries,they need their basic things. Owing to
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the
fact that
,
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 In few decades transportation
buisness
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business
 is rapidly
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, In Canada or nations
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forth
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 half of
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people
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the people
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 are living
from
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 different countries.
hence
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this
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increase
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the
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employment and
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rise
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 in country growth by their talent and productivity.
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,
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 nations
people
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 have
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 to learn about
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 languages, food,
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 etc. That said, there are some downsides
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a mixture
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 of
people
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. Some
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 don't respect each other
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,
this
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 may raise
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racism and fight between them.
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schools
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 interview,
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 man asked some questions
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students about school raking and the result was shocking. He said
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 reason for racism is cultural shock.
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Moreover
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people
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 are moving so they have no touch with their roots.
However
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,
there
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 background countries
are not stop
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 growing. no one is
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about
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 their mother language, just because they want to show that now they are modern. Admittedly,
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is
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hurt
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their elders. Without any
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 those
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 eyes want to see their children
are
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respect
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hand
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and
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having
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 faith
regard
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to
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this
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 own ancient
culture
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To conclude
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,Having Changed in life is essential.I believe that we should never break touch with
are
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root
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,
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moreover
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 we should teach our children about
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our own
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culture
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 and behave.
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