Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.
From ancient time
nationality
debate is ongoing.Some individuals claim that for more employability cultural contact between various communities is necessary, Add a comma
,nationality
while
others want to stick to their origins.This
essay will analyze both side
of the argument before arriving at a reasoned conclusion.
On the one side, There are many advantages of Change to a plural noun
sides
create
contact with different nation Change the verb form
creating
people
.Firstly
, it can help in
various Change preposition
apply
business
.Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
Eventhough
nowadays Correct your spelling
Even though
majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
people
moved different
countries,they need their basic things. Owing to Change preposition
to different
tthe
fact thatCorrect your spelling
the
,
In few decades transportation Remove the comma
apply
buisness
is rapidly Correct your spelling
business
grow
. Change the form of the verb
growing
For example
, In Canada or nations Add a comma
,forth
forth
half of Correct your spelling
fourth
people
are living Add an article
the people
from
different countries.Change preposition
in
hence
this
increase
Change the verb form
increases
the
employment and Correct article usage
apply
making
Wrong verb form
makes
rise
in country growth by their talent and productivity. Add an article
a rise
the rise
Moreover
,Different
nations Change preposition
in Different
people
have chance
to learn about Correct article usage
a chance
others's
languages, food, Remove the s
others'
culture
etc.
That said, there are some downsides having
Change preposition
to having
mixture
of Add an article
a mixture
people
. Some people
don't respect each other culture
, this
may raise the
racism and fight between them.Correct article usage
apply
For example
, In an
Change the article
a
schools
interview, Change the noun form
school
media
man asked some questions Correct article usage
a media
to
students about school raking and the result was shocking. He said Change preposition
apply
main
reason for racism is cultural shock.Add an article
the main
Moreover
Add a comma
,Moreover
people
are moving so they have no touch with their roots. However
, there
background countries Replace the word
their
are not stop
growing. no one is Change the verb form
do not stop
respect
Replace the word
respectful
about
their mother language, just because they want to show that now they are modern. Admittedly, Change preposition
of
this
thing is
hurt Unnecessary verb
apply
to
their elders. Without any Change preposition
apply
doubt
those Add a comma
,doubt
elders
eyes want to see their children Change noun form
elders'
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
respect
Replace the word
respectful
hand
Correct your spelling
and
having
faith Wrong verb form
have
regard
Change preposition
in regard
to
Change preposition
apply
this
own ancient Change the word
their
culture
.
To conclude
,Having Changed in life is essential.I believe that we should never break touch with are
Correct your spelling
our
root
, Fix the agreement mistake
roots
moreover
we should teach our children about Add a comma
,moreover
own
Correct pronoun usage
our own
culture
and behave.Submitted by pawanpreetkaur653 on
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