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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, to become a success in life everyone ought to obtain
skills
. Some folks believe that these qualities should be earned from the university or other tuition centres and I disagree with
this
 statement. In my opinion, people can become successful through their own experiences and learn from their mistakes. The primary reason of disagree with
this
 approach is that students need to concentrate
to
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 each and every
subjects
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 to pass the exams.
In other words
,
Children
 have no time to do any extra
works
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work
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 apart from their
study
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studies
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.
For instance
,
children
 go to school in the morning and come back home
at
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in
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afternoon
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the afternoon
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 with so
many
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much
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 homework, which was given by their professor.
Therefore
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time
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the time
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,
children
 spend their time
to
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doing their school
works
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work
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.
Moreover
, school
children
 have fear about their future exams, so they are concentrating on
the
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 study preparations.
Secondly
, some
skills
 were not taught by
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 to students.
For example
, communication skill is really important to pass
the
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competetive
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competitive
 exams.
Due to
lack
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 of
this
 skill, university
children
 are failed in their job recruitment process. Another possible reason is, there are not aware of the industry
skills
. It means
,
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apply
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 they are not aware of new technology which is top in
current
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the current
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 market.
Moreover
,
children
have
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lack
of
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basic
skills
, which is
very
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a very
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 essential
thing
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things
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 for their life.
As a result
, they are becoming
success
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 without
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these
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 important qualities. In conclusion,
university
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a university
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 education provides only basic knowledge of any
skills
 and qualities. To become a famous person, every individual should learn from their past, implement it in to present and see the yield in the future.
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