The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main eatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main eatures, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below
illustrate
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that
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the amount of four diverse substance that were reused between 1982 and 2010 in a special area.
Overall
, The graph shows four various materials which they use in the recycling area.
Also
, the recycling rate
demonstrate
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paper and cardboard have
high
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rate from 1982 to 2010.
Moreover
, The plastics are
end
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of the graph so its has
tiny
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quantity, indeed recycling process has other materials
such
as
alimininium
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aluminium
cans,
glass
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and glass
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containers.
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,
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paper and cardboard were
reusing
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have a big portion number is 65 % in 1982. From 1982 to 1990 the paper and cardboard
were fluctuated
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but by 1990 started
an
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sudden increase to 1994,
next
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period
is gradually decrease
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and by 2010 reached 70 %. Another material is the
alimininium
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aluminium
cans in 1986 began
a
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enormous growth,
then
in 2010 reached a peak quantity been just under fifty.
Secondly
, The glass containers were started in 1982 next period of time gradually down and been 40% in 1990.
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,
at
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the next time was
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raised from 1994 to 2010.
The plastics
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were one of the
using
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materials in 1990, almost not change any time remain steady between 1990 and 2010.
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