The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
The line graph shows the regular peak and minimal temperature in degree celsius,
while
the bar graph presents the number of rainy days
in Brisbane
bad Canberra
monthly.
In the first chart, it can be noticed that both the maximum and minimum temperatures in Brisbane
are higher than in Canberra
. In Brisbane
, the climate is warmer from January until March and it becomes colder as it reaches the lowest temperature of up to 10 degrees Celsius in the middle of the year
. In contrast
, Canberra
has a colder January while
June to July is the coldest as it is almost reaching zero degrees celsius.
The second data shows that compare to Canberra
, Brisbane
has the rainiest days
starting from the first quarter of the year
. While
in the mid-quarter, it remains unchanged. On the other hand
, Canberra
is quite opposite to that Brisbane
. There is more number of days
with rainfall in the middle year
and a constant of 6-8 days
for the rest of the year
.
To summarize, it can be concluded that living in Brisbane
is warmer than in Canberra
. However
, it is rainier there than in Canberra
,especially at the beginning of the year
.Submitted by yzevahc13 on
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