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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a lot of companies spend their
money
 on
space
 exploration
as well as
 inventing new machines to explore the
space
, I strongly agree with the idea of spending
money
 on
things
 that help our
nation
 to benefit from it in the future. In the first hand, some
people
 think that spending too much
money
 on
space
 exploration is a waste of time and
money
, but there are others who have the passion on exploring new
things
, so they don't mind about wasting
money
 on looking for new
things
 about the
space
.
In addition
,
government
 has a big role on these decisions, they can easily decide to spend
money
 on some useful
things
 to our
nation
.
For example
: to help improve our society by building new metros and trains for new transportation to reduce crowded places
instead
 of exploring the
space
 and wasting a lot of effort. In the other hand, the
government
 should spend
money
 on building new hospitals and charities.
Moreover
, to help minimize poverty in our
nation
, the
government
 can help poor
people
.
Such
 as: by building refuges for these
people
 and help them to be a part of expanding our
nation
 by spending
money
 on better
things
.
Furthermore
, the
government
 is responsible about where to spend
money
. In conclusion, there is a wide variety of
people
 with different opinions about where the
government
 should be spending
money
 whether for
space
 work or on some beneficial
things
 for the country to help it be more flourished in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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