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Many major cities today are becoming bigger and more crowded. Why is this happening? What measures can be taken to solve this problem?

#cities #measures
Nowadays, most
of
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the
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cities
 are becoming larger and extra crowded. Bigger
cities
 provide all
kind
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 of amenities to
people
 as compared to small
towns
,
therefore
 everyone is moving from villages and
towns
 to
cities
. There are
few
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 actions which can be done to resolve
this
 issue. I will discuss some of my
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 of
views
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 in the upcoming paragraphs. There are many reasons behind the
overcrowdness
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overcrowdedness
overcrowded
 of
cities
.
Firstly
,
cities
 give more facilities to
people
 by giving them
opportunity
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 to study, work and better
life-style
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. For the sake of study,
younger
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 generation is moving towards the
cities
, as students get practical education over there. With their work, they do jobs to pay their bills. They get all
kind
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 of facilities that they do not get in small
towns
,
such
 as more schools and universities.
Moreover
, they learn to work with their studio which Helps them to become independent and pay their own expenses.
Additionally
, the lifestyle in
cities
 is much better
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town
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 which made them
to
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move and live in
cities
. There are some measures which can be taken to reduce the
above mentioned
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 problem. Government should provide extra amenities in small
towns
 and villages, which will help
people
 to stay
at
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 their own village rather
then
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 moving to
cities
.
Furthermore
, Teachers should teach students about the benefits of living in their own
cities
 which helps them to connect with their family and friends. In conclusion, the facilities which
people
 get in bigger
cities
 attract them to live there. It
also
 gives
people
 extra opportunities which they don't get in small villages.
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