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Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern society that cause this stress and how can we reduce it?

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The more we
work
, the more we get stressed, and it has become one of the most concerning issues
people
 face across the globe. In
this
 essay, I argue that lack of
time
 and technology play a key role in causing
stress
 in
people
 and that a possible solution can be taking some
time
 off
work
. Most jobs are now strenuous and stressful. One of the main reasons is the continuous
work
 schedule. Most jobs are from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m. and get extended if they have deadlines. Employees are told to
work
 even if they go back home because of the backlogs and which is a concerning situation. Another reason can be the living expenses. Because of the economic downfall,
people
 are now worried whether they will able to put food on the table making living difficult and frustrated with no leverage from
work
 making
life
 even harder.
Hence
, these reasons contribute to creating anxiety and worry.
Stress
 reduction is possible.
Firstly
, taking breaks in between or after
work
 hours. Doing exercises, going for a walk, and listening to music can help reduce tension during
work
 and helps to calm your mind.
This
 can drastically improve your
work
 quality and
hence
 improve your
work
life
 reducing
stress
 by the
time
 you reach home. Another solution can be spending quality
time
 with yourself and with your near and dear ones. With
this
 busy lifestyle,
people
 tend to spend most of their
time
 working and
not
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 able to take care of their families or themselves.
This
 creates tension and frustration. Enjoying
time
 with one another helps to relieve
stress
.
Hence
, our main aim is to have a balance between our
work
life
 and family
life
 and not to worry about the future, but to be in the present doing whatever possible to live a happier healthier and
less
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stress
 -free
life
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment
  • financial instability
  • social safety nets
  • constant connectivity
  • work-life balance
  • remote work
  • social isolation
  • community support
  • chronic illnesses
  • affordable healthcare
  • public health campaigns
  • mental well-being
  • high-stakes testing
  • holistic education
  • flexible working hours
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