The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010
The line graph illustrates the
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
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men
and Change noun form
men's
women
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membership
in a Fix the agreement mistake
memberships
gym
in 1980 and 2010.
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Overall
, Linking Words
number
of Change the article
the number
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men
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men's
gym
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membership
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were
decreased, Unnecessary verb
apply
while
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women
were Use synonyms
increase
in the Wrong verb form
increased
period
given. At the beginning of the Use synonyms
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period
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,period
numbers
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number
in
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of in
men
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gym
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membership
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were
higher than Correct subject-verb agreement
was
women
which Use synonyms
in
the end of the Change the preposition
at
period
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number
of Change the article
a number
the number
women
of Use synonyms
gym
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membership
become higher number than Use synonyms
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men
.
In Change noun form
men's
term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
men
, Use synonyms
begun
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began
just
over 2000 Change preposition
at just
people
in 1980 and Use synonyms
falling
dramatically to slightly under 2000 Wrong verb form
fell
people
before Use synonyms
rose
significantly to Wrong verb form
rising
the
peak at around 5000 Correct article usage
a
people
in 2005 before Use synonyms
dropped
dramatically to lower than 1000 Wrong verb form
dropping
people
by the end of the Use synonyms
period
.
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On the other hand
, in 1980 Linking Words
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women
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women's
gym
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membership
started at around 1000 Use synonyms
people
and rose significantly to almost 3000 Use synonyms
people
in 1995 before Use synonyms
fluctuated
and Wrong verb form
fluctuating
decrease
until the end of the Wrong verb form
decreased
period
.Use synonyms
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