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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The graph and chart illustrate data about the average daily
temperatures
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 and quantity of
days
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 with rainfall during a year in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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.
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, fluctuations in daily
temperatures
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 in
Brisbane
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 demonstrated higher scores during one year in comparison to
Canberra
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. The number of rainy
days
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 revealed a download trend in the summer
months
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 in
Brisbane
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 and an opposite trend in
Canberra
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. Minimum
temperatures
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 in both cities showed a steady rise from August to January and a gentle decline from February to June. The difference in minimum
temperatures
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 was between 5 and 8 degrees. Variations in average daily
months
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temperatures
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 in
Canberra
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 were 30C in winter
months
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 and almost 10C in July. In
Brisbane
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 were some fluctuations from January to June and a rise from 20C to 30C to December.
A
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The
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 number of
days
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 with rainfall were 14 higher
the
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than the
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Canberra
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's rate by approximately
a
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apply
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half.
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 it declined up to 7 in the summer
months
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. At the same time was a peak (10
days
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) in
Canberra
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, days, brisbane, canberra, months, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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