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Some people believe that it is good to share so much information in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe some information are too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #world
These days one of the most controversial issues around the world is
information
 and how we can gain profitable data.
Meanwhile
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 some
people
 believe that
people
 should share their
information
 free of charge but,other
group
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groups
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 think some
datas
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data
 are really significant and worthy to be public.In
this
 essay,I will discuss both
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 and I will give my opinion. On the one hand,it can be beneficial if
people
 can share their knowledge with other students,
scientist
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scientists
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 or
researcher
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researchers
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.The reason is that all
people
 can attain numerous data in different areas and in
this
 way,not only many
people
 can advantage
a
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of a
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lot of
information
 but
also
 they
dont
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don't
 need to spend money on
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an experiment
the experiment
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experiment
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experiments
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 that
people
 did it before.
In addition
,many
people
have
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 not
affordability
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the affordability
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 to pay money to buy
wide
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a wide
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 variety of
file
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files
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,published
book
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books
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 or
an expensive magazines
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expensive magazines
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.
For
example
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 many
people
 in deprived or under-developed countries have
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tonot
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not
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no
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 access to pay foreign currency to buy useful
file
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files
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 or
datas
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data
.
On the other hand
,well-informed or educated
people
,First of all,try hard to find or investigate their questions and they spend time and money to gain the desired result.They may take an effort to be
succesful
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successful
 in
specifiec
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specific
topic
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topics
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.
Secondly
,many companies or factories can benefit from buying their
datas
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data
 or their innovations.For
examples
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example
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,during
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 of
corona virus
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coronavirus
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 was
a
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apply
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stiff
competions
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competition
competitions
 between pharmaceutical companies around the world to find
the
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better solution to prevent from
virus
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the virus
a virus
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.Some
specifiec
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specific
 factories had a lot of income when they produce and sell
the
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vaccines,it could not be lucrative if they share their
information
 or formulation for free for
public
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the public
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.
To sum up
,in my perspective some data or
information
 should be pricey because many
people
dont
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don't
 exactly know about the value of
datas
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data
 in
this
 way when they buy them they know how they are worthwhile.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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