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There is a problem in the road outside your house. Write a letter to your local councilor. In your letter -introduce yourself -explain what the problem is -tell the councilor what you would like to be done

#road #house #councilor #-introduce #-explain #-tell
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to complain about the problems of the
road
 outside my house. I am a local resident of Cheery Street and have been living with my family members there for almost two decades.
To begin
 with, our local
road
 is quite old
as well as
 there are lots of holes in a short distance of every part of the street as so many trucks and lorries have been commuting in our neighbourhood over the
last
 three years.
In addition
 to
this
, on rainy days, the holes are filled with water, and
as a result
, inhabitants have difficulties walking or driving. I would really appreciate it if you could reconstruct the
road
 as soon as possible and ban the commute of heavy transportation to tackle the above-mentioned issues or we are all eager to contribute to the
road
 service with pleasure and delight. I look forward to receiving a prompt reply to
this
 letter from you at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Robert Gordon
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General
To further enhance your letter, consider diversifying your sentence structures and using a wider range of vocabulary related to your topic. This will make your argument more compelling and your writing style more engaging.
Task Achievement
For Task Achievement, ensure all parts of the question are fully addressed. Adding specifics about how the road's condition has affected you personally or the community can strengthen your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Maintaining coherence and cohesion can be further improved by adding transitional phrases to smoothly guide the reader from one point to the next. Also, consider a brief summary or conclusive sentence at the end of each paragraph to reinforce your points.
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