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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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called
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Islip
 as it is now and its future map for
improvement
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the
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 condition in the city
center
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centre
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. As it is clear,Island will experience numerous changes in the future.First of all,in
present
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plan
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 there are a handful of shops near the small main road,
that
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most of them will be relocated
in
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 the new shopping
center
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centre
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.And
also
 dual
carriegeway
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carriageway
 will construct around the city
center
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centre
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as well
as
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a
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bus
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the bus
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 station and car park will add to the area to improve the condition of transportation in
Islip
 town
center
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centre
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.The main road will completely demolish in
next
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the next
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 plan.
According to
 the maps,
Islip
 town
center
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centre
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 now has not
a
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 appropriate place just for pedestrians but it will
develope
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develop
 in new
desighn
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design
 of
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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.
In
addition
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park
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parks
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 that
are
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 in the
south-east
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southeast
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 of the plan will be smaller than now and new housing will build near the park and
also
 in
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the north-east
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north-east
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northeast
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 of the map.One
further
 place
that is
in
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 the maps is
school
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a school
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 that
it
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will be intact in the next future design of
Islip
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words islip, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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