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In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have dissapeared or are disappearing. What problem is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this solution?

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Nowadays, most of the
traditions
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 are disappeared because of the enormous impact of globalisation. One of the problems causes by
that is
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 the
technology
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 and how
people
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 choose to use it in their lives.They could preserve and promote tradition by teaching their
children
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 and keeping them present in their lifestyle. On the one hand,
technology
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 helps
people
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 develop a better lifestyle but used every day lends to forget the value of
traditions
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. Traditional festivals and celebrations which in the past were celebrated by
people
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 to have fun and make different activities manually are replaced today by machines and
technology
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.
As a result
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, communities have forgotten the
importance
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 of folklore and their
children
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 are used to modern life.
For instance
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, in the past
people
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 chose to dance and sing at festivals and involved their
children
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 in these activities,
however
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, now at festivals we listening music recorded and
people
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 do not dance in popular and traditional style and do not pay attention to their
children
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 to teach them how to dance or how to sing the traditional melodies. It is very important to preserve the culture and the
traditions
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 in our life because they represent us and our country. Several measures could be taken by the government and
people
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 to continue the
traditions
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such
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 as more campaigns to explain the
importance
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 of them and different programmes to teach
children
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 about history and how to practice it. The government could implement more courses in
children
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's schools to develop
this
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 idea and teach them about it.
On the other hand
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, parents could tell
children
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's stories about their past and involve more in how to do that.
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, Autumn Festival is a celebration where they can learn about the
importance
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 of agriculture and at the same time to have fun dancing and practising folklore like crafts and the
importance
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 of autumn in our life. Government and parents must be more involved in keeping
traditions
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 alive in their
children
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's lives. In conclusion,
traditions
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 are replaced in some places by
technology
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,
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 some solutions need to be taken like promoting more history and teaching
children
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 about that. If the population are more aware of the value of tradition we will still have it in our lives many years from now.
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