In some countries, young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard for their study. What do you think the causes and what solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Families in certain areas of the world suffer from
peverty
Correct your spelling
poverty
.
This
Linking Words
led many of the young people in these families to
abonden
Correct your spelling
abandon
their studies and work at a premature
age
Use synonyms
.
This
Linking Words
essay with
explore
Change the verb form
exploring
show examples
the causes and the
solusions
Correct your spelling
solutions
solution
for
this
Linking Words
issue. I will
also
Linking Words
provide examples from my own experience. There are multiple reasons that made the youth in some regions of the world
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
work at an early
age
Use synonyms
. The first reason is the lack of money.
Due to
Linking Words
the fact that the parent cannot sustain them financially, they have to seek another source of income.
Secondly
Linking Words
, In some
cultures
Add a comma
,cultures
show examples
the sons have to work in the family business
Change preposition
from
show examples
since
Change preposition
from
show examples
young
Add an article
a young
show examples
age
Use synonyms
. They do not have the
options
Fix the agreement mistake
option
show examples
to
persue
Correct your spelling
pursue
another carrier.
This
Linking Words
complicated problem has many
solusions
Correct your spelling
solutions
that can be implemented. The government can force
lows
Correct your spelling
laws
show examples
and regulations to forbid them from working at a younger
age
Use synonyms
. Festivals and shows
Submitted by dr.yushi on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Leisure time
  • Pressure
  • Study
  • Competitive
  • Education system
  • High expectations
  • Parents
  • Society
  • Financial pressure
  • Flexible
  • School schedules
  • Work-life balance
  • Mental health support
What to do next:
Look at other essays: