More and more parents are deciding to educate their children at home rather than sending them to schools. What are the causes of this phenomenon?

nowadays the figure of parents who are unwilling to present their
children
at
school
increase
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significantly.
this
phenomenon has several reasons. in
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happening. on the one hand, many commentators justifiably argue that there are several drawbacks when
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children
go to
school
. they insist that when their
children
commute
at
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school
, they
are become
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familier
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familiar
with some bad
behavior
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. they believe
this
is a threat to their
children
so they
preffer
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prefer
continue
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education
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their education
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at home
insted
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instead
of
school
.
furthermore
, in some regions education have a low quality
especially
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in
the
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poor country.
hence
the parents are willing to educate by
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.
in addition
, there are those who subscribe to
this
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view that
the the
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poverty are decisive factors to prevent present pupils at
school
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • educate
  • traditional schools
  • personalized
  • flexible
  • quality
  • safety
  • religious beliefs
  • ideological beliefs
  • negative experiences
  • education system
  • online resources
  • educational materials
  • individual strengths
  • individual weaknesses
  • bullying
  • social pressures
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