The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The provided diagram depicts the process how to produce
sugar
from sugar
cane
. Overall
, there are 7 stages to making a final product that clients can purchase it. Moreover
, the first three steps dedicate to preparing the raw material, and the remaining stages illustrate making sugar
.
To begin
with, sugar
cane
has been grown for 12 to 18 months in the place where farmers plant it. Then
, farmers harvest the sugar
cane
, and the harvesting machine crushes it into juice, which means the sugar
state is changed to liquid by using the machinery tool. Next,
utilizing the limestone filter, the juice is purified.
Furthermore
, the juice shifts to the next stage, which becomes syrup using an evaporator. After that process, the sugar
distinguishes the sugar
crystal from the syrup throughout the fan. Ultimately, the sugar
passes the last
step, which is drying and cooling it into a cane
, and it becomes to ready to serve the clients.Submitted by batukaq on
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