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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Currently,some people consider that e-learning is more useful and more comfortable than
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 and many
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 of
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 others argue that face-to-face
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 can use several websites,like ChatGPT or Coursera and get more information,when they
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 online,pupils can understand better,when they
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. I partially agree with these ideas and I will explain my position. Dozens of thousands of pupils want to
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 can learn new topics more specifically and with more information
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when they
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 online. When a student learns online,he can use several useful websites,like Quillbot.com for checking mistakes,or ChatGPT.com to find important information.
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, they can
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 in international courses,which are taught by Top
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 teachers and which they learn unique and new types of teaching strategies.
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 who cannot participate in ordinary schools can
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 at home.For these reasons, more and more
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 want to choose online
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 can give several advantages. Pupils can learn
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 their subjects
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, they can concentrate faster to learn the topic, because other things like the internet or games,cannot bother them.
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, they can get more data,which is obtained by teachers face-to-face.
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, for these reasons,traditional
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 is a good way. In conclusion,
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,online
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 has more advantages than
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 one. For the mentioned reasons, in my world view,online teaching will replace traditional
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,because
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 can learn much more data from the internet platforms and they can learn anywhere and anytime.

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task achievement
In the introduction, clarify your thesis statement more distinctly to make your stance apparent from the beginning. This will enhance the clarity and direction of your essay.
coherence
Use more varied linking words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas and enhance cohesion. This will make transitions between your points smoother and your arguments clearer.
task achievement
Incorporate specific examples or studies to enhance your arguments rather than general statements. This will provide stronger support for your points and demonstrate task achievement more effectively.
coherence
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, helping to frame your discussion effectively.
task achievement
The essay covers both viewpoints, which fulfills the requirement to discuss both sides of the argument.
coherence
You have identified several key points for each side of the argument, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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