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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can be better for their overall skills development and creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree?

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Doing some fun activities with biological children can be better for their
overall
skills
 development and creativity than just reading some interesting books. I personally agree with that notion as I learned from much evidence that stable upbringing
kids
 not only have well-improved both motor and communication
skills
 but
also
 they can learn special
skills
 relating to their
parents
.
To begin
 with, people who nurture their son or their daughter by themselves when they have their spare time will understand their
kids
' development, both physical and emotional.
Parents
 are going to give some step-by-step stimulation by playing and guiding them to develop their base
skills
such
 as moving (walking, running, cycling, etc.) and speaking.
For example
, the couple will play "come catch me" with their infant to teach him/her how to crawl.
Then
, when the infant grows up to be a toddler, the spouse will conduct training wheels. Not only that
kids
 can be agile with their hands and leg, but they
also
 can speak well because of used to communicating with their
parents
.
Besides
, children commonly imitate their parent's passion.
Parents
also
 love to teach their talent, hoping their big baby will have that talent too.
For instance
, when
kids
 spend a lot of time with their
parents
 who love playing the piano, direct-indirectly they are able to master it soon. That middle childhood will be taught about musical scale, how to press the piano keys, melody, and so on. That activities boost creativity and balance right-left brain side performance.
To conclude
, I believe that many
kids
' improvement will be established if the parent can spend their time doing enjoyable activities with their offspring.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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