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Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time, because it has no direct connection with people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days,
people
 from a range of items can obtain
news
 like newspapers and TV programs, but a group of
people
 think that the amount of time that spend reading or listening to the
news
 is a waste of time owing to the fact that it does not affect
people
's lives. I do not subscribe to
this
 idea inasmuch as
news
 helps the population to know about the alternatives that a variety of subjects have and these changing has a lot of effects on
people
's devices and health. On the one hand, if we know about the newest gadgets that are produced by various companies, we can buy them and make our lives better. To illustrate, Today, a number of robots, which are vacuum cleaners, are generated by several companies;
consequently
, when
people
 do not read newspapers or watch TV, they do not know about them and their advantages; in fact, they do not buy these tools that help them to have more comfortable lives.
On the other hand
, when communities do not listen to or read the
news
, they know about neither the natural evidence
such
 as Tiphon, earthquakes, and so on nor virus epidemics.
In other words
, these kinds of inhabitants may kill or become illnesses
due to
 the fact that they do not have any information.
To sum up
, In my opinion, it is crucial that
people
 invest time in the important
news
 that have a lot of influence on their health and aid them to buy new gadgets that lose their work.
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