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immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reason of immigration. To what consequences it can lead?

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these days, the number of
people
 leaving their countries
have
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 increased. There are many reasons for
people
 to immigrate to another
country
.
This
 essay will discuss the major impact of immigration,
the
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 reasons and consequences for migration. First of all, the main reason for
people
 moving to another
country
 is economic facts. Lots of students prefer studying abroad
due to
 better conditions, the
government
 offer
higher
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 scholarship for young
people
 who wants to study at their university. The
government
 encourage youth to study in their
country
's universities and suggest a few conditions for them,
such
 as high scholarship, letting students be an intern in their future job and it helps them to get knowledge and experience in their sphere.
For instance
, the Czech Republic let students study in universities for free If they know the state language, It is an example of advantageous motivation. On the positive side, immigration helps the
government
 to develop their
country
. A lot of specialists move to perspective countries to get new knowledge and degree and generally after graduating from
university
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 they stay in that
country
. It contributes
increasing
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 the
amount
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 of
people
 and the number of
high
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 qualified workers.
On the other hand
, the massive amount of immigration can speed up the pollution of the air.
For example
, China has the biggest
number of
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population in the world. It means that
people
 use lots of vehicles and
due to
this
 fact, we can find out that there
are
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the
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a
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 huge pollution of the air. In conclusion, I want to say that the
government
 contributes to
people
 leaving or moving to another
country
.
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