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Some people think that Modern Technology is making people more sensible, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both points and give your opinion

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The majority of
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 argue that nowadays because of
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people
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 are sensible,
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 others believe that it will affect their social communication. In
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 I will discuss both points of view and share my opinion as well with some relevant examples. On the one hand, In today's ,era
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 is improving so fast and because of that the majority of
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 are so dependent on
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,
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 provides some facilities which
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 very helpful for the entire humanity most of the services are online and everyone can access them very easily around the world.
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, shopping is the best example of modern
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 where
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 can order items online and they will have them in a few minutes at the door of their house.
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,
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 has an essential role in
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's sensibility.
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, other groups of
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 consider that
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 will have some negative impact on society.
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, nowadays every one so busy with computers or mobile phones which will avoid individuals to communicate with their friends or family.
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, these technological improvements separate
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 from being social and friendly with each other.
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, today most of our young generation spend the most time playing video games and they are in almost all day in their home so because of that they feel more lonely and never think of having friends or being sociable. In conclusion, we should have a balance between using
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 and being sociable because these two factors are most important and human life. In my opinion,
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 improved the friendship level of today's generation because there are various types of platforms where you can make friends and chat with them easily and because of that most
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 became more sociable compared to the past.
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