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Band 4

write a letter to the company. in youe letter describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports company and paying for the concerts. say how think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam. Today
i
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 have read an article about
you
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 activity by which, you can provide sponsorship in our city. it’s
pretty
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 good idea for local people
,
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 because it
get
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 us and
children
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large
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a large
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 opportunity. As
i
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 understand your program has two ways, and at
this
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 moment you have a choice between
sponsorship
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 local children’s sports team for two years, or
to pay
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 for two open-air concerts.
First
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of
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,
the
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apply
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sponsoring
sports
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a sports
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 team is
good
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 idea for the reason of
helth
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health
. Children must have a
lot
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 physical activity, which present
days
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 is
rarely
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, because they have a lot of
device
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devices
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 like a smartphone,
tablet
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 and PC, and spend time at home. And it will
helps
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 them grow
more
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healthy
Secondary
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, with help of
sport
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sports
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 activity, they have
chance
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a chance
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 for
future
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the future
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, like
first
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 step in professional
sport
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. And what about open-air concerts? It would be
nice
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 idea too.
Local
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 public can spend time with interest too. People need some entertainment
it
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 their life and
grow
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 their cultural level.
To
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 my mind,
best
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the best
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 way to spend money like sponsor children’s
sport
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sports
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 team, they would be
spend
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 their free time
heppily
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happily
 and healthy, with benefits in future Yours
sincirely
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sincerely
, Vlad

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