Society is based on rules and law. If individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. It could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

All communities are set up on
rules
and
law
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. If people be free to do what they want , It is obvious that It is not able to perform.
while
I
am agree
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with individual
freedomm
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freedom
freedoms
,
but
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there should be some
rules
to
controll
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control
folks. First of all, during the history of
countries'
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,setting
rules
are always necessary. As a
prominant
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prominent
Example,
Hamurabi
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Hammurabi
, the king of
Bobilon
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Babylon
assigen
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assign
some laws for Babilon's
inhabitant
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in order to harness the
folks
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folk's
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behaviour.
In addition
, in recent decades,
as
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the relationship among members of a community
have
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been getting more complicated
specialy
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especially
specially
speciality
since
the
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traffic
rules
become crucial in our daily life.
For example
, if drivers do not obey the
transportation's
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transportation
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law, anybody can not drive
safty
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safely
or even any
pedestrain
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pedestrian
pedestrians
will not be able to pass a street without risk of an accident,
thus
in our era, communities will face to
requirenment
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requirement
of more
strike
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rules
.
Furthermore
, if individuals going to disobey norms, our life will confront
to
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many issues,
For example
, if folks be free to steal any artefacts, people will have to protect their finance
by
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their own
that
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can lead any
societiy
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society
to
a
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disaster.
However
,
rules
should not
ristrict
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restrict
societies
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freedom, everybody should be free to have his own
religous
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religious
belife
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beliefs
belief
,
polictical
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political
tendency and
indiviaual
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individual
decision. In
conclusin
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conclusion
,
while
I
belive
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that every person should be free to make
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the decision
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decision
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for his life or have his own
belife
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belief
beliefs
,
but
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in our era
have
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law is essential in order to prevent occur any adverse incident.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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