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Some ex-prisoners commit the crime after being released from the prison. What do you think are the causes? How can it be solved?

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it is true that Some ex-
prisoners
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 commit crimes after being released from prison. there are various reasons for
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situation
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,and measures need to be taken to tackle it . there are several reasons for
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situation
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, one of the main causes is the prisoner's lack of education,
job
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 training and legal knowledge, so it is hard for
prisoners
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 to find a
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 by themselves, so they may and they did not have any income that they can not afford to buy food and water to support families so that the only way to get the food is to commit crimes.
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,it is difficult for
prisoners
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 to transition back into society because when they finding a
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 ,some employer does not hire someone with the criminal record ,and leading them to commit a crime . another contributing factor is that public awareness
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 affects
prisoners
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 committing the crime because some people thought the
prisoners
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 pose a threat to society,and that will lead
prisoners
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 to a sense of isolation and discredit so they commit the crime again. various measures can be taken to address
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situation
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.
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,the prison has the responsibility to provide them with vocational training including education ,
job
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 training and legal knowledge,and improve their practical skills and improve career prospects, and
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 help them prepare for employment .
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, the prison should edify the criminal, and improve the moral standard for
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. in conclusion , there are several causes of
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situation
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,and various measures could be taken to improve it
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