Mrs Jones, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town , has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barrett. In your letter Suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Jones, My name is John, full-time student at Brock University. I am writing

this

letter to hire me for your home. You advertised on the internet about a helper that you need for the upcoming summer. So, I am available to assist you in household chores like cleaning, cooking, and organizing.

Also

, I have a cooking certificate which I got from my back school.

In addition

,I love gardening and planting which would be easier for you. As you mentioned about two pets, I will take care. I really need

this

job to complete my basic needs like grocery, bus fairs and other expenses.

Moreover

, nowadays, workplaces are demanding work experience so, for gaining experience, and building confidence, I am looking for

this

opportunity. I can come at weekends after midday and on weekdays, from 4pm to 8pm. Make a call on 56699xxxxxx or send me a message. Waiting for a prompt response from your side regarding

this

request. Yours sincerely, John

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task achievement

Ensure all parts of the task are fully addressed with sufficient detail.

coherence cohesion

Improve the logical connections between paragraphs for better flow.

coherence cohesion

Polite and appropriate greeting and closing for the letter.

task achievement

Adequate task response with a clear structure and purpose.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

162 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

household chores
domestic tasks
organizing
gardening
experience
availability
commitments
gain experience
relationship
advertised
help in her home
build a relationship
free time
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