it is ten years since you left college, You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college. Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter • say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise • explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way • describe what help you need to organise this event

Dear Amy, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am incredibly sorry for not having been in touch recently. Life has been a bit hectic. I am writing
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letter to reach out for help from you regarding the anniversary celebration
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. I am planning an anniversary
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with our college classmates to celebrate our graduation for 10 years.
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will take place in the AC hotel
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is located in the NC mountain area, and I
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booked a room in the restaurant of
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hotel
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week. I believe that
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will become one of the memorable moments in our
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. First of all, the atmosphere of the room is tranquil and serene. Seating on the balcony, overlooking the beautiful natural
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and reminiscing about our interesting old stories would be fantastic.
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, the food in
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hotel is delicious, especially the steak
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water-mouthing. I have contacted 20
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classmates in our college, and they have expressed their excitement
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, and they will come on time.
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, there are 3 persons, who are Tom, Jerry and Alice, that I cannot find. I would be grateful if you could help to invite them to our
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. If you would like to discuss
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event
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further
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, please contact me without hesitation. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Best wishes, Nian

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a little more detail about the help you need.
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Task response: Your tone is good, but some lines sound a bit formal. Use a more warm and natural style for a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow. To make it better, link ideas with simple words like and, so, because, and also.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep each sentence clear. Some sentences are too long and can be split into two.
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Task response: You cover the event, the reason, and the help clearly.
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Task response: The purpose of the letter is clear from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and closing.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph mostly has one main idea.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • plan
  • party
  • get-together
  • friends
  • old
  • ten years
  • college
  • place
  • date
  • time
  • invite
  • guest
  • budget
  • money
  • cost
  • food
  • drink
  • cake
  • music
  • talk
  • share
  • memory
  • story
  • photo
  • wall
  • help
  • join
  • come
  • together
  • nice
  • easy
  • small
  • warm
  • soon
  • let me know
  • thanks
  • see you
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