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Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose. Others believe that it is merely a distraction from real life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #art #lives #purpose #distraction #life
OVER THE YEARS, IT HAS CHANGED SOCIETY AND IT HAS INCREASED OPPORTUNITIES FOR
PEOPLE
, AS EVEN
ART
 HAS BECOME AN AREA AVAILABLE FOR
EVERYONE
.
NEVERTHELESS
,
PEOPLE
 ARGUE ABOUT THE BENEFITS THAT
ART
 COULD BRING TO OUR LIVES,
FOR INSTANCE
 GIVING MEANING AND A PURPOSE;
BY CONTRAST
, OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IT IS ONLY A
FURTHER
 DISTRACTION FOR OUR LIVES. ON ONE HAND,
ART
 IS ONE OF THE MOST IMPORTANT WAYS OF EXPRESSING FEELINGS, THOUGHTS, AND EMOTIONS AND A TOOL THAT ENABLES US TO TELL AND TRANSMIT THE PAST TO THE PRESENT. IN THE PAST,
PEOPLE
 USED
ART
 TO EXPRESS EVENTS, EVOLUTIONS, AND STATES OF MIND GIVING TO US SOMETHING TO UNDERSTAND THE PRESENT.
MOREOVER
, NOWADAYS
ART
 IS BECOMING MORE AVAILABLE AND NOT ONLY A BRANCH FOR HIGH SOCIETY BUT FOR
EVERYONE
: IT IS CONSIDERED VERY HELPFUL FOR
PEOPLE
’S HEALTH, AS
DUE TO
ART
 THEY COULD EXTRAPOLATE FROM THE WORLD AND BE THEMSELVES WITHOUT ANY JUDGES.
FURTHERMORE
, IT COULD REPRESENT A PRIVATE MOMENT, WHERE
EVERYONE
 COULD EXPRESS THEIR FEELINGS AND FEEL SATISFIED
DUE TO
 THE FACT THEY ARE DOING SOMETHING GRATIFIED.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, SOMEONE BELIEVES THAT
ART
 IS USELESS AND A DISTRACTION FROM
PEOPLE
’S LIVES.
THIS
 VIEW IS BASED ON THE PRAGMATIC IDEA OF THE WORLD, WHERE
PEOPLE
 HAVE TO USE IN A BETTER WAY THEIR TIME, AVOIDING ANY SUPERFICIAL ACTIVITY AND
IN PARTICULAR
 WITHOUT ANY ECONOMIC RETURN.
NEVERTHELESS
, I BELIEVE IN THE IMPORTANCE OF FOLLOWING YOUR OWN PASSIONS AND FINDING A PRIVATE MOMENT WHERE
EVERYONE
 COULD BE THEMSELVES.
FURTHERMORE
,
DUE TO
 THE GLOBALIZED WORLD,
PEOPLE
 SHOULD CREATE IN THEIR EVERYDAY LIFE A MOMENT DEDICATED TO
DEVELOP
Wrong verb form
DEVELOPING
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 THEIR INTERESTS.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetic
  • cathartic
  • cultural tapestry
  • expressionism
  • fleeting
  • introspection
  • monetary value
  • nostalgia
  • profound impact
  • socioeconomic
  • subjective perspective
  • visceral response
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