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Nowadays, the media focuses on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree?

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As we all know, publishing plays an important role today. Nowadays a lot of communities in the world follow the
media
 closely. Especially, most young crowds use social
media
, and they reach knowledge more easily. Everyone has a smartphone, and there are a lot of applications for reaching
media
 which are Twitter, and BBC
news
. Thanks to these apps,
people
 can follow the agenda easily.
According to
 investigators,
this
 can have many negative effects on
people
's psychology. Particularly, problems and emergencies situation may cause several problems for humans. let's talk about the impact of good and bad
news
 on
people
. First of all, I would like to tell you about something which is the negative effect of
media
 on
people
. If we think about the recent past, We had a disease called covid-19, In those days,
people
 recognized the disease from the
media
. many
people
 felt hopeless because
media
 platforms often broadcast emergency
news
. In my opinion, they should have shared more positive
news
. Morale and positive thinking can heal many diseases. We should think favourably, if constant problems and emergencies are taken into consideration, it may be harmful to the individuals. At
this
 point, The
media
 has great power in
people
's thoughts. In conclusion, many
people
 pay attention to the
media
 and the
news
. As I mentioned before, information or
news
 is much more easily accessible.
News
 channels and
media
 should consider
people
's psychology because there may be several benefits or negative effects on
people
. I firmly believe that
media
 platforms will think more about human psychology than ratings.
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