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Topic from The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households

Topic from The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households
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The first line graph shows the percentage of
families
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 owning a washing
machine
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,
fridge
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 and vacuum cleaner at
home
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 between 1920 and 2019,
while
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 the second figure illustrates the number of
hours
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 that a family engaged in
household
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 chores in the same reporting period.
Overall
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, there was a significant growth of
families
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 owning three electrical machines at
home
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,
although
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 the
ownership
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 of a washing
machine
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 has declined gradually throughout the period.
Moreover
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, the time spent on
household
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 chores has dropped over the 99-year duration. Looking at the details, the washing
machine
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 was the most popular
household
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 appliance in 1920, with 40% of
families
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 reported to have owned one.
This
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 figure continued to surge, until 1960, there was a 30% increase in
families
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 reported having a washing
machine
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 at
home
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. The
ownership
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 of a washing
machine
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 fluctuated between 60% to 80% from 1960 to 2019. Interestingly, there was no
household
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 reported to have a
fridge
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 in 1920,
however
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, it
then
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 experienced a dramatic jump to 90% of the
families
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 reported having owned one in 1960. Since
then
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, all households reported having a
fridge
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 at
home
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. The
ownership
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 of a vacuum cleaner followed a similar trend where starting with 30% of households owning the
machine
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. By 1980, it was tripled what it was in 1920. The
ownership
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 of a vacuum cleaner ended at the same level as the
fridge
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 at 100% in 2019.
Additionally
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, the
hours
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 spent on
household
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 chores fell gradually, from 50
hours
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 a week in 1920 to 20
hours
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 a week in 1960. After 1960, the number of
hours
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 spent on housework fluctuated between 20 to 10
hours
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 per week.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, machine, fridge, home, hours, household, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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