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It is common nowadays for each member of the family to have their own piece of modern technology. Some people think this will lead to a break down in family relationships and communication.(To what extent do you agree?)

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friendship
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.
i
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this
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 will explain how
technology
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 the situations and conditions when we meet together.
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technology
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situations,
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 means
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technology
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people
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not have friends because in situations
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people
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communication
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 or
interactions
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 with other
people
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people
only
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 busy with
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gadget
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modern
technology
.
for instance
, based on my experience, many
people
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friendship
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 when they were
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a child
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child
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 and long time no see
your
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their
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 friends. and
in
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at the time, you and your friend met in one of
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place
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. when you met you and your friend was busy with
gadget
 and make sure you and your friend can not release story and talk
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 other. on other hand,
technology
 can you seem you
modern
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people
 than adults.
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people
addict
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with
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the gadget
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gadget
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gadgets
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. so, when
you
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your
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 family feel like that. in conclusion,
techonology
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technology
 make your family
lost
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 communication and relationship because everyone is busy with
the
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apply
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gadget
 or modern
technology
.
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